A couple years ago I took my first online class and loved analyzing poems. It inspired me to try writing some of my own, which I hadn't done in about 30 years.
This was my first attempt, a Robert Frost-style of poem in that there is meaning hidden under the description of nature. It has very little exact rhyme, but does have a strict meter, except for the opening and closing for reasons of visual effect. Notice that the structure of the poem resembles a cylinder-style bird feeder with many perches outstretched and a wider base at the bottom.
I have one of those cylinder feeders in my tree outside my living room window and feel like my best entertainment is a $5 bag of birdseed for it. I just love watching the antics of birds and squirrels.
|Photo taken by my brother at the Henry Doorly Zoo.|
Pecking Order By Janet Sobczyk, 2010
her thin arms outstretched,
chirp their discov’ry,
quickly flit away,
A Cardinal comes,
till satisfied it
bounds to the feeder,
large, black shiny seeds.
sprinkling to the ground.
chatters in disgust
Alone again she
The Gard’ner will come
She is the center of activity, love, and care.
Did you guess the following symbolism?
Feeder is a mother
Sparrows are children
Seeds are love and care
Red Cardinal is any daily emergency, big or little, that takes precedence until handled
Squirrel is marital discord/conflict that leaves mother feeling empty and alone
Gard'ner is God who fills mother with consolation & grace to continue loving & caring for others